Senryū (川柳, literally 'river willow') is a Japanese form of short poetry similar to haiku in construction: three lines with 17 or fewer total morae (or "on", often translated as syllables, but see the article on onji for distinctions). Senryū tend to be about human foibles while haiku tend to be about nature, and senryū are often cynical or darkly humorous while haiku are more serious. Unlike haiku, senryū do not include a kireji (cutting word), and do not generally include a kigo, or season word.
OURS IS ...
Bother me no more
I have better things to do
so long to bad days
leave me now headache
for I need my life again
allow me freedom
breathing in fresh air
the hurt of you will be gone
once more I can smile
YOUR TURN
ENJOY
JL&B
ENJOY
JL&B
You would have me cry,
ReplyDeleteThough you care for me no more
You still want to rule.
My heart feels so raw
But my mind will take no more,
My resolve hardens.
I choose my freedom,
I will not let you hurt me,
I scorn your torment.
Why should I listen
To your tired, worn-out laments?
There’s no life in them.
Now I take my stand.
I turn my back on our past
And claim my future.
Very nice Penny !!
ReplyDeleteThis is quite interesting. All this time I was writing haiku i was actually writing Senryu! I enjoyed yours quite a bit and I hope your head feels better. Here's mine:
ReplyDeleteThought I wrote haiku
Guess I was wrong all along
I've learned something new.
Sorry to say that I do not know what is Haiku and Senryu, so ignorant of me. But this one great poem with emotions. :)
ReplyDeletevery masterful job..
ReplyDeletelove the imagery...
Happy Rally.
wow! great sengyru.. here's my wk 39.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2009/11/17/regret/
ReplyDeleteYou did the form honor, and succinctly conveyed the irritation of being infirm.
ReplyDeleteThank you all...
ReplyDeleteFAIRYLANDERS RESPONSES ...
Kathy and Patsy - Whose Real Name Is Kathleen wrote
22 hours, 50 minutes ago
glad to see you back
and know you're feeling better
nice you let us know
hope things still improve
and that you soon feel better
better than ever
rain for your flowers
and sun to dry the showers
happiness for hours
xxx
Kathryn and Honeysuckle Rose wrote
14 hours, 12 minutes ago
Memories painful
Fill the pages as I write
But there is a purpose
My words may comfort
Or open eyes of another
Let me reach one soul
I stretch out my hand
I have felt those feeling too
We are not alone
Sadly there are more
Women with anger like mine
Hurts, fears and secrets
I share my story
With it's painful memories
Someone will need it
KC. 3-3-11
Jackie and Gypsy's Zoo of Love (Florida) wrote
16 hours, 15 minutes ago
I hope you are well
and your pain goes away soon
I miss all your posts
your garden is great
your flowers are so pretty
I will be back soon
xoxoxo
Karen and Karina wrote
1 day ago
Senryu
Oh thank u Bandit
For taking care of JL
Missed u both so much.
You must have been sad
Seeing your best friend in pain
Your tears kissed her brow.
A little more rest
With you right there by her side
brings healing her way.
Each days a challenge
Today's a New Beginning
Enjoy its treasures.
I wish for you both
Peace good health and happiness
With love that is true.
Nice one! I love the opening lines: Bother me no more / I have better things to do--so simply but spunky. Thanks for checking out my rally entry as well!
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