This is a prompting Blog

My intent here is to write a poem from the prompt I give to you , the reader, in hopes that it will inspire something and get others to write with me.

Saturday, July 9, 2011

Todays Prompt is FIRST AND LAST

The rules are you must use this line as the first AND last line in your write...
Today's line is CAN'T YOU SEE MY WORLD IS CRUMBLING... You may use prose or poetry... OURS IS...


"Can't you see my world is crumbling?" she asked, looking a little dismayed.
Tossing him that HELP ME look she added, "It's bad enough that my Moon isn't rotating like it should, but now the Earth is falling apart too."
"Oh, come on, it's not all that bad", he said, picking up the crumbling shape and looking it over. "It just needs a little more water over here and it will be just fine."
"WATER!?! It's already half covered with water, any more and there won't be any land left. Water indeed!!" Pouting as she often did when she knew he was right. She didn't like to admit that he was better than her at this, but there really was no denying it.

He took the Earth into his hands and inspected it more closely. It wasn't as bad off as she seemed to think it might be. Adding more water to it, he could hear her take in a breath, as she started to voice a complaint, but he held up his hand and she paused, knowing that if the little sphere could be fixed, he would be the one to do it.

He tinkered with it a little more, while she went to refresh their drinks. When she returned, she could see that he was pleased with what he had done. She looked at the Earth and saw that it was no longer the crumbling mass she had handed him just moments ago. 'He really does work wonders', she thought, as she stepped up beside him.
"There, see... it's just fine," he said, giving the Earth back to her, "I fixed it for you."
She inspected it very carefully, wanting it to be perfect. After all it is one of the most important pieces to this universe they were making. Flicking off a loose piece of the land mass and lightly blowing the dust off, she gave him an approving look.
"Well I guess that will do," she said as she looked the little blue globe over. "At least it looks pretty."

Looking over at him, she sighed deeply and he could see a tear forming in her eye. He smiled an ever knowing smile as he walked closer to her.
"It will be fine, I promise you. Perfect in fact... Trust me."
She smiled up at him as she wiped the tear away. She knew he was right of course, and when they put the Earth in the universe, even the Moon started to rotate properly, and it was good. Perfect in fact, just as he promised.
Out of all of the universes that they had made together, they both agreed this one was the best.
Loving it so, she asked if she could take care of it. Knowing how much it meant to her, he did not deny that request.

As he looks upon us now, every once in a while you can hear his giggle. It is in the breeze, and she knows. The Heavenly Father is smiling, remembering the day when Mother Nature looked at him and said, "Can't you see my world is crumbling?"



  1. What a great story and a beautiful write.The diamond has indeed been polished and shines with a brillance all it's own.I am so proud of you lady.

  2. Wow... this is an incredible write. I could so feel the struggle with the art piece they were creating, the "it's not quite good enough feeling' and then... you bless us with a fabulous ending. Smiles. Just incredible!

  3. Oh! This is a breathtakingly beautiful story! I read the prompt and was more or less anticipating something about someone's life falling to pieces or a relationship going bad. I was wonderfully wrong about that! This has to be the coolest creation story I've ever read, you've outdone yourself my dear!

  4. WOW! What an amazing story and write! I think you ahve out done yourself this time JL! Impressive!
    YOu will be a hard act to folow but I will give it a whirl!

  5. Yep you outdone yourself. Love, love it. hope you have a restful day..Susie

  6. ♥ Jl, This by far is my favorite of all your wonderful writes! An imaginative, intuitive, awe-inspiring piece...